托福独立写作怎么审题范文(精选六篇)

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托福独立写作怎么审题篇1

案例1:误解原意思

Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things, they can do few things well?

Original:

Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period. Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement. Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.

解析:

文章第一句话不是对原题目意思进行解释,而是采用采取了和原意思相反的做法来进行题目诠释;第二句表明自己对误解题目的观点;第三句话对自己的观点进行近一步的解释;第四句一个过渡性的句子。开篇内容安排倒是很好,但是作者犯了误解原题目意思的错误导致后面整个文字都做了无用功。

Revised:

When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously, they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly. Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time. Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors .Therefore , I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done . The reasons are as follow.

Revised:

第一句话对原题目意思进行了很好的诠释;第二、三句话进一步解释原题目;第四句话提出自己的观点;第五句话过渡性句子引起下文。

案例2 :语言罗嗦,绕弯子给出自己观点,浪费时间

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

original:

With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child. So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.

解析:

这个开头看似没有任何问题,但是仔细分析就会发现很多问题。首先,作者绕了个大弯才给出自己的观点。其次,观点是对原题目的抄写,改动的比较少。最后,开篇缺少引起下文的过渡句。更大的错误是这个开头更像是一个全文主要观点的一个分论点。

Revised:

As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family. Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However, considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically, I think to live independently the earlier, the better. Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.

解析:

第一句话诠释原题目意思;第二句话进一步解释第一句话;第三句话提出自己的观点;第四句话解释自己的观点,引出下文。

托福独立写作开篇第一段是整个文章的主机调,这个部分如果出现问题整个文章就会黯然失色。

托福独立写作怎么审题篇2

一、审题的“精确性”

根据专家对于过去2年独立写作考题的分析,发现有90%以上的题目属于“支持/反对”型:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Because the change of the society is so rapidly, people are less happy or less satisfied with their life than people did in the past time.

而剩下的则是由“对比论述型”构成的:

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Some people think children should spend most of their time in studying and playing while others think they should help their parents with the household chores. What’s your opinion?

在审题时,考生必须首先把题目通读1-3遍,彻底把握题目主旨后,方可进行段落布局。在这里,笔者结合自己的经验给考生们一些建议:首先,判断题目是否包含“绝对”含义的词,若有,则按照上篇讲过的建议布局,若没有,则对于同意或者反对的理由进行快速的brain storming, 然后根据分论点的数量及论点的可延展性来敲定立场:

Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Disagree:

1) Endangered animals are valuable because of their limited quantities

2) Environment balance

3) Endangered animals sometimes stand for the country, so they are more valuable than farmlands

Agree:

1) life quality is the top priority

2) endangered animals can be raised in the zoos

经过一番考量,假如考生得出了上述的一些分论点及想法,这时候,主体段的布局基本就可以敲定大方向了。第一种就是完全反对题目的说法,采用五段式结构布局,每个主体段论证上述三个分论点中的一个;第二种也是反对题目的说法,采用五段式结构布局,但是前2个主体段从三个分论点中选二个去论证,而第三个主体段从“同意”的二个分论点里去选一个,最后的结论还是倾向于反对的。

第三种是采用四段式结构布局,即第一个主体段从三个反对意见中选择二到三个分论点去写,而第二个主体段则从赞同的分论点里去选择,数量上比前一段少一个即可,最后结论还是倾向于反对多一点。这样说是不是有些同学看了会有点“晕”呢?那下面笔者就再举个简单点的例子吧:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

Disagree:

1) Most people are common, so they want to know something about famous ones

2) Famous people stand for some fashion

3) Constrain the public figures

4) Celebrities can improve the national cohesion and unity

又经过了几分钟思考,我们得出了上述的四个分论点,但是一时半会赞同的理由实在是想不出。若考试的时候遇到这种情况,千万别犹豫不决,马上从已经想好的观点里面进行挑选。于是,这个题目我们就采用完全反对的立场,以五段式结构布局全文,主体段的分论点从上述四点中挑选三个展开论述即可。这样一来,大家是不是明白一点了呢?

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Agree: Parents make decision for children.

1) Parents have more experience

2) 15-18 years old children are not adults, so they can"t take responsibility

还有一种情况就是我们只能想出两个分论点,这时候考生应该果断采用四段式布局,而这一次,两个主体段都分别论述一个同意的理由,而在结尾时,可以顺便提一些反对的理由,这样也不失为一种灵活的方法,希望考生们可以借鉴。

二、分论点的排列原则

专家提醒考生们,在布局的时候我们不是随意编排分论点的先后顺序,而是需要有一定的逻辑性和合理性。一般说来,五段式的三个主体段,若都是同意或者都是反对的理由的话,一般这些分论点有两种逻辑顺序,即第一种按照“重要性”来排,将你认为最主要的理由放在第一个主体段中详细论证;第二种是按照“小到大”的原则,即个人方面的理由先写,然后再是家庭,公司,最后再是社会,国家等。

倘若所有的论点都是在一个范围内的,比如都是属于个人的论点,则这个时候要看这些分论点后续的论证内容的多少,比如某一个分论点你既举得出例子,又可以进行对比或者因果论述的话那肯定应该先写这个分论点,若某一个分论点后续能够阐述的理由只有一句话的时候那就应该果断地将其排在后面写。若文章是四段式的结构,则在一个主体段中的排列顺序和前面讲的原则是一致的。

托福独立写作怎么审题篇3

同学们考写作考了这么多年,大多数出题的形式都已烂熟于心,看到题目之后觉得熟悉于是兴冲冲提笔就写,其实,这种看似“熟练”的表象下藏着巨大的隐患——同学们很有可能因为看得太快而忽略某个决定题目意思的关键词。例如:

例1:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the only main cause for people’s unhealthy eating habits.

看到这个题目,同学们立刻会开始想,有没有other reasons for unhealthy habits,想出三条

如:1. People’s tight schedules do not allow them to eat at regular hours;

2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on “endless diets”;

3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever.

综上所述,advertising is not the only cause.

这个写法看起来非常完备,但其实犯了一个不起眼却严重的错误——题目不是要我们证明it is not the only cause,而是要我们去证明it is not the only main cause。多一个“main”,意思是很不一样的。如果我们只需要证明it is not the only cause,那么找出other causes即可即例1中的写法。但是,如果我们要证明it is not the only main cause,就需要证明other causes that we mentioned are also main causes,这就需要在每一段中加上一些专门的说明。或者,更简单的办法是去证明advertising is not even a cause, 直接在每段的末尾加上advertising与该段所论述的unhealthy eating habit无关的论述即可。If it is not a cause, how can it be the only main cause? 这样一来,就不用通过证明还有其他main cause来反驳了,事实上,证明某种cause是main cause还是挺有难度的,因此笔者推荐同学们用后一种方式进行论述。因此,文章还是disagree,而三段的主题句分别应该是:

1.People’s tight schedules do not allowthem to eat at regular hours, and it is obvious that they are too busy to be influenced by advertising;

2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on “endless diets”, and this is more like a result of human nature, the pursuit of beauty, but not advertising;

3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever, and it is quite clear that no advertisingencourages them to do so.

例2:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges and universities should offer more preparation for student before they start working.

看到这个题目,很多同学会可能会这样写:Agree. 1. Students should take more specialized courses (专业课)in order to be knowledgeable and skillful enough for their future careers(接着开始论述being knowledgeable and skillful的重要性); 2. Participating in internships helps students to have a clearer picture of their vocational development in the future(接着开始论述如果没有实过习,在工作的时候是多么地feel so unprepared); 3. Attending more club activities is an effective way to improve social skills, which are crucial for success both in life and at work(接着开始论述good social skills对职业和生活的帮助).

如果不看括号里的内容,仅看主题句,这篇文章是没有任何问题的。然而,括号中的论述从严格意义上来讲,是不能支持“more”这个关键词的。举个简单的例子:“我们需要钱”和“我们需要更多钱”在证明的时候重点是不一样的。如果证明“我们需要钱”,应该详细阐述钱的“不可或缺性”,比如生活、学习、教育都需要钱;但是如果证明“我们需要更多钱”,重点则应该放在“钱不够”的论述上,证明在学习、生活、教育方面的预算都很紧张。同样地,上面的题目中仅仅证明Knowledge for careers, field experience and social skills are important是不够的,事实上,这些根本不需要证明,需要证明的事情是graduates today are not well prepared in the three aspects. 因此这篇文章应该是一篇“抱怨型”的文章,详细地去论述学校工作的不足。参考思路如下:Agree. 1. Many students today complain that they cannot learn practical skills and up-to-date information, for some of their teachers are not qualified enough to teach specialized courses; 2. Since many students are not allowed enough time to participate in internship programs before graduation, they know very little about what their future jobs like; 3. Joining clubs is possible for every college student, yet not every club provide is capable of offering enough opportunities for students to practice their social skills.

同学们在写文章的时候一定要注意,学术论文写作不是句型和辞藻的堆砌,整篇文章一定是一个well-organized system,这个system中很重要的原则之二就是——1、每个中间段的topic sentence是用来支持main idea的;2、topic sentence后面的每句话都是用来支持该topic sentence的。在上面的两个例子中,大家会发现例1的错误主要是main idea没有很好地被topic sentence支持;而例2的错误在于topic sentence虽然看起来是支持main idea的,但是论述的内容可能跟关键词“more”无关,从而不能有力地支持topic sentences。这些错误的起因,则是对题干中关键词的忽略。

托福独立写作怎么审题篇4

托福独立写作:常见审题误区

同学们考写作考了这么多年,大多数出题的形式都已烂熟于心,看到题目之后觉得熟悉于是兴冲冲提笔就写,其实,这种看似“熟练”的表象下藏着巨大的隐患--同学们很有可能因为看得太快而忽略某个决定题目意思的关键词。例如:

例1:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the only main cause for people"s unhealthy eating habits.

看到这个题目,同学们立刻会开始想,有没有other reasons for unhealthy habits,想出三条如:1. People"s tight schedules do not allow them to eat at regular hours; 2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on “endless diets”; 3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever. 综上所述,advertising is not the only cause.

这个写法看起来非常完备,但其实犯了一个不起眼却严重的错误--题目不是要我们证明it is not the only cause,而是要我们去证明it is not the only main cause。多一个“main”,意思是很不一样的。如果我们只需要证明it is not the only cause,那么找出other causes即可即例1中的写法。但是,如果我们要证明it is not the only main cause,就需要证明other causes that we mentioned are also main causes,这就需要在每一段中加上一些专门的说明。或者,更简单的办法是去证明advertising is not even a cause, 直接在每段的末尾加上advertising与该段所论述的unhealthy eating habit无关的论述即可。If it is not a cause, how can it be the onlymain cause? 这样一来,就不用通过证明还有其他main cause来反驳了,事实上,证明某种cause是main cause还是挺有难度的,因此笔者推荐同学们用后一种方式进行论述。因此,文章还是disagree,而三段的主题句分别应该是:1、1. People"s tight schedules do not allow them to eat at regular hours, and it is obvious that they are too busy to be influenced by advertising; 2. Sometimes people are eager to lose weight or to keep fit so that they go on “endless diets”, and this is more like a result of human nature, the pursuit of beauty, but not advertising; 3. Bearing heavy burden both physically and mentally, some consider eating constantly as their most effective stress reliever, and it is quite clear that no advertising encourages them to do so.

例2:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges and universities should offer more preparation for student before they start working.

看到这个题目,很多同学会可能会这样写:Agree. 1. Students should take morespecializedcourses(专业课)in order to be knowledgeable and skillful enough for their future careers(接着开始论述being knowledgeable and skillful的重要性); 2.Participating in internships helps students to have a clearer picture of their vocational development in the future(接着开始论述,如果没有实过习,在工作的时候是多么地feel so unprepared); 3. Attending more club activities is an effective way to improve social skills, which are crucial for success both in life and at work(接着开始论述good social skills对职业和生活的帮助).如果不看括号里的内容,仅看主题句,这篇文章是没有任何问题的。然而,括号中的论述从严格意义上来讲,是不能支持“more”这个关键词的。举个简单的例子:“我们需要钱”和“我们需要更多钱”在证明的时候重点是不一样的。如果证明“我们需要钱”,应该详细

阐述钱的“不可或缺性”,比如生活、学习、教育都需要钱;但是如果证明“我们需要更多钱”,重点则应该放在“钱不够”的论述上,证明在学习、生活、教育方面的预算都很紧张。同样地,上面的题目中仅仅证明Knowledge for careers, field experience and social skills are important是不够的,事实上,这些根本不需要证明,需要证明的事情是graduates today are not well prepared in the three aspects. 因此这篇文章应该是一篇“抱怨型”的文章,详细地去论述学校工作的不足。参考思路如下:Agree. 1. Many students today complain that they cannot learn practical skills and up-to-date information, for some of their teachers are not qualified enough to teach specialized courses; 2. Since many students are not allowed enough time to participate in internship programs before graduation, they know very little about what their future jobs like; 3. Joining clubs is possible for every college student, yet not every club provide is capable of offering enough opportunities for students to practice their social skills.

同学们在写文章的时候一定要注意,学术论文写作不是句型和辞藻的堆砌,整篇文章一定是一个well-organized system,这个system中很重要的原则之二就是--

1、每个中间段的topic sentence是用来支持main idea的;

2、topic sentence后面的每句话都是用来支持该topic sentence的。在上面的两个例子中,大家会发现例1的错误主要是main idea没有很好地被topic sentence支持;而例2的错误在于topic sentence虽然看起来是支持main idea的,但是论述的内容可能跟关键词“more”无关,从而不能有力地支持topic sentences。这些错误的起因,则是对题干中关键词的忽略。

托福考试作文独立写作范文:中学生应该在上大学前花时间工作旅行吗

Students should spend at least one year working or travelling before they go to the university.

【题目大意】: 中学生是否应该在上大学之前拿出至少一年去工作或旅行。主观点可以同意,因为一让学生放松,二可以让学生学到新的技能。

题目:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:

Students should take at least a year to work or travel before beginning college.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel. It"s better than attending university straight away.

范文参考一:

The prevailing notion is that high school students are under huge pressure. Then appears a controversy whether students should have one year to engage in other things before they attend their university. After weighing the pros and cons, I am favor of the opinion that having a gap year can produce many benefits.

First off, students can benefit a lot from traveling. As everyone knows, to maintain strong competitiveness, high school students are required to accomplish a wide range of either required or optional curriculums at school and the rights to develop their own interests have been deprived relentlessly, which has proven to be a detriment of their growth. Instead of pursuing their bachelor degree without pause in the college, traveling can help them regain chances to cultivate and perfect their personalities and release pressure. For instance, many more college graduates are reported to be indifferent to the society and show no mercy on those in need, part of which owes a lot to the fact that schools lay more emphasis on cultivating students’ academic abilities and downplay the importance of developing their overall qualities. Traveling to those places in poverty can give students a sight of those impoverished families to call on the sense of responsibility. Besides, by paying a visit to some places of interest like the Great Wall or the pyramid in Egypt, students can approach the greatness of diverse culture. What’s more, the direct access to the natural world can appease students’ inner uproar. Accordingly, a gap year can be a great asset for high school graduates.

Secondly, by taking part-time jobs, not only can students accumulate sufficient social experience but also earn some money to reduce financial stress on their families. Though economy in China keeps growing at a rate of almost 9 percent in the recent, average citizens still suffer huge pressure especially when the slump of stock market took a heavy toll on them and the majority of stock investors withdrew their money and reinvest to the real estate, further increasing pressure on the ordinary because of the increasing prices of housing. For most families from small cities and rural areas, college tuition still appears to be a great burden on them and by taking part-time jobs, students can earn some wages to relieve financial pressure, such as serving as a restaurant attendant that enables students to better develop their communication techniques and learn more about how to meet the demands of consumers or working as a salesman that will be an entirely different experience from high schools and can lead to the cultivation of the ability of presenting customers the advantages of products. Obviously, a gap year means a lot to high school graduates.

Admittedly, there is another voice that high school students are supposed to start their campus life immediately after graduation from high schools. To be more specific, maintaining high-efficiency study can lead students to be better acclimated to their college life. Instead of going to college soon, a gap year may disrupt their study schedule and weaken their learning skills. It appears to be sensible, however; the ultimate goal of attending a university is to seek a decent job and gaining social experience in advance makes students more conscious of which kind of area they are more interested in in the near future such as the serving industry or high-tech fields.

In conclusion, high school graduates had better live a different life temporarily before they go to college.

写作参考二:

Gap year, a break between high school and college, has become a trend among many American and European students theses years. As the popularity of gap year has grown, so to has its appeal. Generally, it can be constructed (working in a company, taking time off to improve coding skills, learning a language, working on personal projects) or unconstructed (travelling, figuring out what to do as it comes). The idea of gap year has been strongly questioned by some nervous parents, however, some supporters contend that it will be a lifelong treasure which enables one to have the full command of his life. From my perspective, taking a year to work or travel before college brings about more advantages than shortcomings.

To begin with, a gap year helps guide students’ future education and life goals. Most of young students do not know exactly what they wanted to do once they left high school or even half way through college. Working or travelling a year will give them some “real world experience” as well as insight into their interests and strengths which will help them shape a path to a successful career. Once students learn a whole lot about themselves, they are likely to take full advantage of college. Take an Australian boy for an example. Enjoying his gap year in Nepal, he helps the locals in Pokhara to build their organic farms. He is so passionate about what he is doing now and he decided to pursue environmental science after he comes back to university. The internships and professional experience gained over the gap year will have much more influence on the development of one’s future than college.

In addition, taking a year off can refresh the tired-out high school graduates. In general, it will take at least ten years before jumping into the long and challenging years of university. There is no doubt that studious students will spare no effort to improve their academic performance with the expectation that they will receive offers from their dream schools. Under the competitive pressure of high school, they will not only prepare for exams such as SAT or ACT but also seek for voluntary opportunities to enrich their Curriculum Vitae. My younger sister used to travel to Cuba to volunteer with brown bears for three months. After that she went to Europe driving her Vespa across more than 20 cities. She said it was so different from school. She won’t have to attend a test at then end of the trimester, which means that there is no peer pressure or any pressure from outside. At the same time she can reorganize her mind which was full of chemical equations, historical events as well as verses from poems.

It is true that students who choose to drop a year are more likely to lose their study skills. During the gap year, there will be less chances for them to participate in actual classes in college. Without attending lectures given by famous professor and communicating face-to-face with classmates, the whole learning process will be incomplete. Many of study skills could not be developed and trained, which leads directly to the deprivation of both academic ability and motivation. However, it won’t be a potential problem nowadays because most of top universities offer MOOC (Massive Open Online Courses). Students can study random topics through free online classes. Although they don’t have any college credit, they learned a lot, met wonderful people, and keep their brains in shape for college.

Ultimately, the benefits of gap year far outweigh the only drawback because it can help exhausted students relax both mentally and physically and provide them with the opportunities to take a step back to focus on their goals, leading to a stronger sense of direction once they’re back in the classroom.!

写作参考三:

Under the educational system of many western countries, taking a gap year, a period of time when students can take a break from formal education, has become quite common. When it comes to the pros and cons of spending at least one year working or travelling before attending university, people’ preference may vary from one to another. As for me, it is advisable for high schoolers to have a year off to work or travel, in order to relax themselves and gain new skills.

In the first place, spending a year travelling will provide high school students a good chance to escape the daily grind. As is common sense, the life of high schooler are filled with countless assignments, various quiz and exams, which nearly drive them to be stressed out. Obviously, what they need most is the vent for releasing all the tensions and pressures accuring in the rapid rhythm campus life. Consequently, taking a break from educaion and going away for while can fulfill this function well. During the gap year, students can surf in Hawaii, wake boarding in Italy, go bungee jumping in New Zealand and enjoy the sunbath on the seashore of Miami. Such a short escape from the daily bustle and hustle will be conducive to their mental and physical wellbeing. Not only this, but travelling during a gap year can provide a renewed vigor for stuy and a more focused approach to learning.

In the second place, taking a year off to do some internship can help high school students acquire more new pratical skills and thus adapt to the university life more smoothly. Many gap year students choose to do voluntary work. This could include teaching in the mountains in Nepal, a conservation project in Madagascar, an expedition in Costa Rica or an internship in Japan. All these experiences of taking voluntary jobs during a gap year will provide you with much more than any classroom setting ever can. We can learn a lot in the classroom, but it isn"t until we put it into practice in the real world that we really understand what"s going on. To be specific, throughout school we are surrounded by the same folks at similar ages. However, while working in a company, we are bound to discover others, make new friends, and interact with people from all walks of life, which will defnitely hone our social skills. It is undoubted that people with strong interpersonal competence can enjoy great popularity among classmates and teachers.

In a nutshell, it is a wise move to spend at least one year travelling or working for the sake of taking a break from daily routine and acquire new skills.

托福独立写作怎么审题篇5

托福独立写作如何正确审题?确定立意是关键

一.托福独立写作如何确定立意

选择论点内在一定要有联系。这其实是整个立意阶段的重头。要立意,就是要明白自己表达的对象是什么,明确立场。然后站在这个立场上,挑选支持自己的论点。

托福写作破题结束后,第二要做的重要事项便是整理行文思路。破题过程其实是个发散思维的过程,而立意,则是要把思维收回来,组织化,理清它的脉络纹路,让他们按照自认为最有说服力的顺序排列好,准备落于纸上的过程。

二.如何确定好的立意

这个说服力的强弱,应该以什么标准判断呢?笔者认为,能说服读者的议论,在论点选择上应该遵循一个原则:

三个(或者两个)论点不能在层面上有交叉,但要符合一条明线:支持全文观点。而最打动读者的论点选择,不仅遵循上面的原则,三个看似不交叉的论点间还有一条暗线贯穿一致。令全文浑然天成,回味无穷。

托福写作辅导提到立意的地一步,按照上面的原则看,当然是先确定观点。以题目为例,笔者愿意选择否,食物易于准备降低了人们的生活质量。第一步踏出去了。

确定观点后,破题时得到的思维方向,明显不利于我的就应该排除。比如营养价值改变这一条,虽然速食文化的确对人体有害,但另一项速食:生疏和熟粗粮,就是向有益方向改变的,两者势均力敌,仅管是很容易想到,也很容易举例论证的论点,却不宜使用,因为如此贸然用了,有思维不缜密之嫌。然而,这毕竟是一块好啃的骨头,如果其他论点都不好论证,还可以回头捡起这一条来,隐去健康速食那个事实进行作文,当然,这依然是下下之选。

如果想写出好的托福独立写作作文,我们首先要确定好文章的立意,这是写作的基础,也是最先要完成的一步。如果立意不够,可能会导致偏题,或者不知道如何开始写文章,立意确定的好,可以给写作指明方向,让写作的过程变的异常轻松

如何提高托福写作 这些最常见的语法错误不能有

自从托福机考开始在全世界普及之后,托福写作部分也随之引入了电子考官(e-rater)进行写作评分。电子考官相较于普通考官,在托福写作的语法评分上表现得尤为苛刻。也正因如此,同学们在准备托福独立写作的时候,语法部分千万不能掉以轻心。

虽然很多同学的语法知识还算扎实,但在长期的教学和作文批改中,我发现同学们在应用过程中,常犯的语法错误还是挺多。其中最为普遍的就是以下句子里出现的错误。讲解之前,希望大家可以拿出纸笔,先自己试着改改。

1.A movie that inspires deep emotions.

2.I studied all night for the midterm, I’m sure I got an A.

3.Me and my brother are majoring in sports management.

4.Collecting seashells are my hobby.

5.Printed books are limited in space, however, space is not an issue for electronic ones.

6.There are many people prefer to wear clothes made of natural fibers.

7.A doctor’s salary is higher than a teacher.

8.Education for kid can be very costly.

找到它们的错误了吗?改好后,我们来看看答案,看看自己做得怎么样吧!

(注意:以下只给出了一种改正方法,但实际上可以有多种修正方式。理解错误原因是关键。)

1.A movie that inspires deep emotions.

2.I studied all night for the midterm, so I’m sure I got an A.

3.My brother and I are majoring in sports management.

4.Collecting seashellsismy hobby.

5.Printed books are limited in space; however, space is not an issue for electronic ones.

6.There are many people who prefer to wear clothes made of natural fibers.

7.A doctor’s salary is higher than a teacher’s.

8.Education for kids can be very costly.

对完答案,感觉怎么样?这个小练习我在课堂也经常做,通常来说,全部做对的同学较少,总有几句会有点问题。如果你全找对了,那你的语法功底很不错,恭喜你!如果没有,也不用灰心,这些问题都是可以改正的。只要你在意识到问题后,练习中自己多加注意并总结,就会有进步。

那说到底,这些句子的具体问题到底是什么呢?不用着急,接下来我们逐句分析。

01 Sentence Fragments

Sentence fragments,句子缺成分,就是指一个句子没有完整,通常来说,可能会缺失主语、谓语、宾语,有时也可能缺失从句或主句等等。

错误:A movie that inspires deep emotions.

这个句子本质上是缺失了谓语和宾语,去掉枝叶留主干,我们会发现这个句子只剩下A movie这一个主语,而没有其他构成句子所必需的谓语。补充完整可以是,A movie that inspires deep emotions seems good.

当然,也可以把that去掉,避免从句的结构,这样句子也是完整的,比如A movie inspires deep emotions.

托福写作中,同学们在短句中一般不会出现这样的错误,但是在写较长的句子,比如复合句等,有时因为添加太多修饰成分,会忘记主句并没有写完,导致出错。这点需要引起注意。

02 Run-on Sentences

Run-on Sentences,中文没有特别合适的翻译,指的就是两个或多个独立完整的句子,直接用逗号连接在一起,没有添加连词或者使用合适的标点符号。有时也被叫做comma splice。

这类错误在批改的学生习作中很常出现,也是较为严重的语法错误,希望同学们引起重视。

错误:I studied all night for the midterm, I’m sure I got an A.

这句话就是一个典型的run-on sentence。逗号前后都是完整独立的句子,用我们中文翻译就是“我所有的夜晚都在为期中考试学习,我很确定我得了A。”翻译看起来似乎完全没有问题,这是因为中文的语法没有太多对句间连接的规则,可以用逗号去连接所有的句子,这也是为什么会有“一逗到底”这样的写法出现。但在英文中,标点符号有它们明确的功能性,而句子不能仅用逗号去连接,“一逗到底”这种写法也是万万使不得的。

通常一个run-on的句子,我们有以下五种方法去改正:

a.把逗号换成句号。

I studied all night for the midterm.I’m sure I got an A.

b.用连词(常见连词FANBOYS: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so)去连接。

I studied all night for the midterm, soI’m sure I got an A.

c.把逗号换成分号。

I studied all night for the midterm;I’m sure I got an A.

d.逗号换分号之后,再加连接副词(however, therefore, etc.)

I studied all night for the midterm; therefore,I’m sure I got an A.

e.把其中一句变成从句,改成复合句。

BecauseI studied all night for the midterm, I’m sure I got an A.

03 Pronouns

代词因为可以替代前面出现的名词,大大简化句子,避免重复以及增强连贯性,因而很推荐学生们在文中使用。但代词的正确使用,也是同学们在托福中较常出现的问题。

错误:Me and my brother are majoring in sports management.

这句话中,Me作为“我”的代词,使用错误。一个代词的正确使用,首先需要注意它在句子中的作什么成分,主语?宾语?确定之后,再用相应的格式。

在错误句子中,“我”是做主语,所以应该换成I,而我们在讨论有其他人存在时,要先说其他人,所以正确的表达是My brother and I are majoring in sports management.

一句题外话,有同学可能会问,这里为什么是are不是am?很好的问题。这就是主谓一致的问题,可以补充下:当主语是用and连接的两者,那么谓语动词用复数形式。

04 Subject-Verb Agreement

主谓一致性。每句话中都会有主语和谓语动词,和中文不一样的是,在英语表达中,谓语动词是必须随着主语的变化而随之变化的。

一般同学们在这部分问题不大(复数主语的动词不加s,第三人称单数的动词需要加s),但有些情况同学们容易搞混,比如前面给出的错误句子。

错误:Collecting seashells are my hobby.

这里需要注意的是,动名词(gerunds)即-ing,做主语,谓语动词通常是单数形式。

Colleting seashells is my hobby.

Writing letters is no longer necessary.

主谓一致这个话题其实除了动名词以外,还有很多细节和不同情况可说,但受篇幅所限,这里就不再展开。

05 Transitional Adverb

连接副词,也是在写作中很青睐的逻辑连接词,比如however, therefore, nevertheless, moreover, thus, hence 等等,都是非常好用,也能增加连贯性的词汇。但在使用中,同学们有时会把它们当做连词(conjunction)去直接连接两个句子,实际上,它们都是副词(transitional adverb),在使用中需要和分号或者句号来使用。

错误:Printed books are limited in space, however, space is not an issue for electronic ones.

通过前面的讲解,所以上面这个错误很明显,就是however和逗号连用,本质上成了我们第二点所提到的run-on sentence,那么改法就和第二点里说到的五种方法一样了。最简单的,就是把中间的逗号改成分号,即Printed books are limited in space; however, space is not an issue for electronic ones.

06 There be

There be句式是同学们常用的一个句式,但在使用中需要注意的是,there be这里面已经包含了动词be,所以在后面继续添加动词时,需要使用从句,或者改成非谓语动词。

错误:There are many people prefer to wear clothes made of natural fibers.

比如这句里面,prefer就是这句的第二个动词,应该进行改动。

正确:There are many people whoprefer to wear clothes made of natural fibers.

正确:There are many people preferringto wear clothes made of natural fibers.

07 Comparison

比较对象一致性,这点也是在写作中比较常遇到的问题。因为托福写作通常会有二者比较,甚至三者比较,那么同学们在写作中,进行两者的优缺点比较的时候,尤其要注意自己是否做到了比较对象的一致。

错误:A doctor’s salary is higher than a teacher.

这个句子就是错将“医生的工资”和“老师”进行比较,正确的应该是“医生的工资”和“老师的工资”进行比较。即应该是:A doctor’s salary is higher than a teacher’s.

08 Countable Nouns

在英文中,需要注意区分的是名词的可数和不可数性。可数名词在使用中,如果是泛指(这在托福写作中尤其常用,当你想说明一个普遍的道理时,通常都会泛指引出),那么注意需要在此类名词前加不定冠词(如a/an)等,如果刚好不是指某一个,而是指一个群体,那么注意,需要用复数形式。这即是我们常说的“可数名词不裸奔”规则。

错误:Education for kid can be very costly.

这句话中kid就是可数名词,因为这里是说明“孩子的教育可能会很贵”,孩子在这只是泛指,因此kid应该改成kids,即正确的句子应该是:Education for kids can be very costly.

当然,这里所列举的语法错误,只是同学们较为普遍的错误,受篇幅和时间所限,只讲解了很小一部分,但这些错误认真理解后,基本能解决大家一大半的语法问题。同学们可以比对自己平时练习的作文,进行自我修正。每次记录、总结自己常犯的语法错误类型,在第二次练习时争取不犯,这样使自己的表达越来越精准。若想精益求精,系统学习语法也不失为一个好方法。

托福独立写作怎么审题篇6

与忽略关键词的人不同,有些同学过于执着于关键词的字面意思,而没能看出其背后的implication,从而被关键词限制住思路,无法下笔。比起忽略关键词,这种错误更常发生在细心且实力不错的同学身上,也很值得大家注意。笔者建议,在写文章的时候要灵活,不要拘泥于关键词的字面意思,否则理由很不好想,就算想出来也很难用英文表达。例如:

例3:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should spend more money on elementary school education than on university education.

题目的意思是说,比起投资大学教育,政府应该在小学教育上投入更多的资金。看到这个题,同学们会有不同的看法,大体来讲无非是两种——认为university education应该花更多的钱或反之。但是,大家很快会发现证明任何一种观点都是不容易的。比如说,有些同学可能会这样写:Agree. 1. Elementary school education involves more students than university education and it requires more money; 2. Colleges and universities have more sponsors than elementary schools so that the government should offer more financial support for the latter.3. Since elementary school education is the cornerstone of university education, it deserves more money from the government.

上面的主题句看起来是没有问题的,然而在展开的时候困难重重——个点里说Pupils的数量多所以花钱多,这的确是事实,可是pupil人均所需要的经费却肯定比university students少,最关键的是,我们并没有数据作为支撑;第二点里说校友或社会人士的支持使得大学在财政方便面比小学要宽裕的多,然而,这还是一个没有数据就无法证明的观点;第三点里说elementary school education是university education的基础所以前者就应当比后者得到更多的预算,这是一个典型的逻辑错误,因此在段落展开的时候将会十分困难。A是B的基础并不意味着要为A花更多的钱。总之,钱本身就是一个可以量化的东西,如果真的以钱的多少来写这道题,在没有数据支持的情况下是很难成文的。许多同学之所以在写的时候觉得自己的文章很牵强,就是因为把该文当成了论述题,而大家要知道,论述题都是要会给出数据让我们来分析的。那么,在没有数据的情况下,这种题目该怎么写呢?找到money后面的implication很重要。其实,题目并不是要我们去讨论哪种教育应该花更多的钱,而是让我们去对比两种教育的重要性,自然地,更加重要的教育就应该花更多的钱。所以我们可以有以下论述:

(Main idea) I cannot agree that the government should spend more money on elementary school education than on university education, because they are equally important.

(Topic sentence) 1. Elementary school education prepares children for college education by teaching them how to learn and what they are supposed to learn.

总而言之,托福独立写作审清题目的关键在于把握好题目中的关键词,不论是理解错误还是忽略关键词都有可能会导致作文写跑题。建议大家在开始写托福独立写作之前先读题目,找到关键词,确定透彻理解以后再开始列大纲准备写作。

托福写作:精准用词

第一种方法是用一个单词代替一组意义相同的单词,比如:

①用forget(忘记)代替do not remember(没有记住)

②用ignore(忽视)代替do not pay attention to(不注意)

③用now(现在)代替at this point in time(此时此刻)

④用because(由于)代替due to the fact that(鉴于下列事实)

第二种方法是省略同义词或近义词,比如在下面例句中,形容词important(重要的)和significant(有重要意义的),就是两个同义词(也可以说是近义词),我们可以省略important,只保留significant。

①The government project is important and significant.(这项政府计划是重要的,有重要意义。)

②The government project is significant.(这项政府计划有重要意义。)

第三种方法是在不改变句子含义的前提下,省略所有可以省略的单词,比如在下面例句中,the cover of the book (书的封面)可以省略成the book cover,is red in color(是红色的)可以省略成is red。

①The cover of the book is red in color.(书的封面是红色的)

②The book cover is red.(书的封面是红色的)

最后我们把这三种方法结合起来,将一个冗长、绕嘴的句子,改写成一个简短、易懂的句子。

①University malls must be accessible and free from congestion in order that students, faculty and employees may have unobstructed passage through those areas of the campus.(校内道路必须是便于通行的,不拥堵的,以便让学生、教师和职员能够无阻碍地通过,到达校园的各处。)

②University malls must be free enough from congestion to allow people to walk through easily.(校内道路不应当拥堵,以便人们顺利通行。)

托福写作:如何避免啰嗦

所谓“言简朴实原则”,就是行文不啰嗦,句子应越短越好,如果一个字能说清楚的,就不要用两个字。

例如:At this point in time,we should pull together for our goal. 现在我们应该为我们的目标团结一致。

这句话中“At this point in time”表示“现在”,我们完全可以用now来代替。

In the majority of cases,he likes to ride bike to the office. 他通常喜欢骑单车到办公室。

很简单的一句话,完全可以写成 He usually likes to ride bike to the office。

平时我们所说的用词多样化和地道并不是体现在这些时间副词或者是完全可以简化的啰嗦句型上,而是指实用性极强的词如动词和形容词,比如:

Original:Solving trivial problems in the dorm will add your social experience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to be kind。

Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your social experience and help you to understand other people"s feelings and learn to be considerate。

add,kind表达的含义都比较宽泛。 add可以指数量上的增加,也可以指程度的加强,对于“丰富经验、增加知识”这个意思,用enrich会使表达更准确。

kind从字面意义上讲是“好的、善良的”,用kind来形容人无法具体地表现出一个人的性格特征到底怎样,原句中是想表达“考虑周到、体贴入微”的特点,要准确表达这个含义应选择considerate。

另外,我们常见的一些累赘用词表现在句意的理解上。

比如:He has had many years of (actual) experience in business。他有多年经商的经验。

actual是多余的,因为experience已经有actual的意味了。

We assembled(together) all the parts for our radio. 我们装好收音机的零件。

assemble本身就有together的意思,因此together是多余的。“平等相处原则”的意思是行文不出现明显的带歧视或偏见的字眼,包括男女性别,也要避免区别,以示“平等”。

例如:

Many businessmen(businesswomen) feel their jobs are very stressful. 许多商人觉得工作压力很大。

这句话写 businessmen或是businesswomen都是不妥当的,可以改为 business people或 business executives或business managers就可以包括男女了。

当然,一些带有种族偏见的字眼,甚至有侮辱的味道(insulting words 或 slur),也要尽量避免使用,以免闹出麻烦。例如:

对黑人不要用 Negro,更不能用Nigger(用 Black 还可以),礼貌的说法 是Afro-American 或African-American;对白人不要用Honky(这是黑人骂白人的用字),正确用法是 Caucasian,或 white people;对犹太人不要用 Hymies,应该叫Jewish 或 Jewishpeople;对越南人不要用 Gook,要用 Vietnamese;至于墨西哥人、西班牙人及中、南美洲人,包括 Puerto Rico,正确的用法多是Hispanics 或 Latins,不过据说西班牙人为了维护自己的文化,倒喜欢别人称为 Spaniard。

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